Dark Star

well its deffinatly deep. a little scetchy and rough in some places with the wording n stuff but pretty gud. ur display of emotion was very clearly displayed and i ...

i really liked this was very touching. though some of the rhyming was a little off you still pulled together an awesome peice of writing. the word held to their ...

i like simple, short but intriguing from beginning to end. the rhyming scheme is pretty good and the feeling that u display is awesome...like totaly bittersweetness kindda. i love how ...

a very interesting poem. i really like the emotion that u displayed through ur use of words. u did an awesome job writing on such a 'subject". ur words flowed ...

i really like the ocncept of your poem. its unique and different. you did a really great job with the stucture and your wording. everything flowed pretty nicely and you ...

hmmm...very different. I LOVE IT!! its simple and short but just gives this awesome dark vibe. the imagery is really intense and it just sends a chill up your spine. ...

very interesting...i really liked it. even though it was an inconsistant pattern the words just seemed to work. sure the idea was a little conventional but you pulled to off. ...

i really enjoyed this poem. it was very unique and different in every way. also very creative. you really caught my attention right to the end. the structure was very ...

you have a great way with words. you know how to make them flow and work together to create both strong and powerful imagery and emotion. it was very haunting ...

very intense! full of imagery and packed with emotion. a very interesting subject i might add. you have a very unique perspective on such unusual topics. you really were able ...

AMAZING! i really have no words to describe how beautifully written your poem was. it was very intense but at the same time not to a point of being draged ...

i liked this poem, though it could use a little touching up. i really like the idea (though it is spelled Gustav, not Gostav). your poem is a dark story, ...

i liked it!! it was mellow and sweet and still came though with lots of emotion. one gets a happy-sad feeling when reading this. it gives one an appritication for ...

i really liked this poem. it was very dark, and deep. there was lots of emotion that poured out through your words. i could sense all the pain that the ...

alright. this poem was deep and dark. it was good but you want to make it GREAT. so first of all... P-U-N-C-T-U-A-T-I-O-N!!!! this is so vital. i cant emphisize it ...